Busted. Not so much a poem, will you C/C please?

Scooter- I beg to differ. I enjoy writing poems, and I have indeed finished quite an amount. This piece of work seemed more like a story, not a poem. If it were a story, it would be a better story, with more detail of course. And by the way, if you were a writer, would you want everybody telling you that your writing is perfect? No, because there is always room for improvement. I think this would be a good little story if it were re-worded a bit.